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The chapters are too small, but it's good, but stories are long not small. :S

On 01-28-2010 22:23 pm 5-Year-Old wrote:
The chapters are too small, but it's good, but stories are long not small. :S

On 01-28-2010 21:30 pm Sakira wrote:
Redoing them? That's gonna take a while, but at least you already know where your story's going to. :D

I can't wait to read more. [I would add constructive criticism, but I'm too lazy to right now. x'D]

Yeah great job.

Screw it, going on next page.

On 01-16-2010 03:42 am DarkEvangel wrote:

I crawled forward into the world of light, only to find a not such a bright world in it.

Like that line as a whole, however better description maybe??

Stories are fun to write. I've been writing a fanfic for months and should really get around to finishing soon...

Chapter 1 complete, but my pararaphs are rather off, I'm not very good at paragraphs.

I find first person is easier to do, yet starting sentences seems to be hard to choose words that have not been previously used.

It is kind of hard to be original with first person, but you can get around that if the person talking is an ***. I posted it. http://www.amateur-writing.com/stories/

I am good at both third person and first person, first person is a little challenging as it has stay with the person and what he sees not what the story sees. Third person is much more easy...First person is more challenging and fun.

this story is just better in first person

oh and here's my complaint, you sound like you are typing a poem not a story.

are you kidding? That is not poetry

it says it was only viewed one time, and that was me

No not your story, Murph's. I like Murph's concept I am just into stronger, longer stories.

ohh, yeah, it does sound like that. Read mine

Ok.....

yeah, it's weird.

Hmm I like your story, it's pretty good.

The story gets moreeee...uhhhhh.... I don't know the word...

Interesting? Complex?

Uhhh. I don't know. xD

I guess more in depth. A bit of action-ish? (Depends what you define as it once you read it.)

The beginning is slow til about the 5th chapter.

What's the characters name? Or is that unimportant?

Originally, I wasn't planning to reveal it until later on, but I am going to let the reader know, but not himself, as he has amnesia. I put the name on the front page.

Oh, nice, I guess his bio will eventually work itself out through the story??